QUOTE(冰封天下 @ 2011年01月26日 Wednesday, 11:39 PM)
我现在指出第二篇的错误之处--1.learning应改为are going to learn 或want to learn。
2,to Guangzhou 应改为in...
3nex year应改为 last year
4she going...应改为 she is going ...
5She has Beijing trip完全是中式英语
6She can playing 不知说什么,要删去
7storng 应改为strong
8He want to stornger应改为 He wants stronger
9So he playing exercise应改为.. is going to exercise
10 He is good完全是中式英语 ,要删去
11she helps parents does应改为... do
12everyone hard doing homework 应改为Everyone is doing homework seriously
13 We are good完全是中式英语 要删去
14 The vacation is interesting应改为 will be
如果按照你吹毛求疵的改作文,第二篇应得零分。对于中国人写英语作文,特别是刚起步的中学生,我们不能要求太高,TA肯动脑动笔来写我们都要加以肯定,在错误中学习成长是每个人的必经之路。
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好吧老实说,两篇在我眼里水平都一样。都挺差的。
哥当年也写不出这么多错误的英文。。
我想起一件事儿,
当年的英语考卷,老师都不怎么改,一般都请一批同学帮忙改,有人改选择有人改翻译还有人改作文。妈的说不定这就是老师偷懒找学生帮改的。